Fixing Headlines.

1) Headline: Berry lowers merit scholarship standards

Problem: Misleading to article and situation.

Solution: Added “renewal”. Berry lowers merit scholarship standards.

Source: Campus Carrier,  via Viking Fusion News.

 

2) Headline: Berry just misses 3-point record in 101-43 Rout of Hiwasee

Problem: Too wordy and confusing.

Solution: Remove excess wordage. Berry just misses 3-point record.

Source: Viking Fusion Sports.

 

3) Headline:Hearts for Haiti

Problem: Unclear what the post is about.

Solution: Should add the event type, concert. Hearts for Haiti Concert.

Source: Viking Fusion Arts & Culture

Source: CNN US News

 

Fixed Lists.

Source: Boba Fett Fan Club

“Of the 49 posts this last year, here is a selection of favorite subjects covered on this blog.

  1. Tonight: Boba Fett on TV, Chat with Daniel Logan
  2. Fett Saves Colbert
  3. Robot Chicken Star Wars III Flirts with Fett
  4. These Aren’t the Mandalorians We’re Looking For
  5. Celebration V: Fett Always Hit with Artists
  6. Mail-Away Boba Fett Returns in 2010
  7. VladislausDantes’ Steampunk Fett
  8. Run Like an Intergalactic Bounty Hunter
  9. George Lucas: “I want to do a Boba Fett story”
  10. Celebration V: Exclusive Interview with Jeremy Bulloch

What would you like to see more now in 2011?”

Should link to each article and count down from 10 to 1 most popular, so #1 is the last.

#10 Tonight: Boba Fett on TV, Chat with Daniel Logan

#9 Fett Saves Colbert

#8 Robot Chicken Star Wars III Flirts with Fett

#7 These Aren’t the Mandalorians We’re Looking For

#6 Celebration V: Fett Always Hit with Artists

#5 Mail-Away Boba Fett Returns in 2010

#4 VladislausDantes’ Steampunk Fett

#3 Run Like an Intergalactic Bounty Hunter

#2 George Lucas: “I want to do a Boba Fett story

#1 Celebration V: Exclusive Interview with Jeremy Bulloch

 

Differing headlines.

(6) China stops import of contaminated chicken from America.

(8) China ceases contaminated American chicken imports.

(6:8) China no longer importing American chicken: Bacteria and chemicals in shipments found by inspectors.

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About therealjames

My name is James Timothy Clarke Jr. I was born in Kennesaw, Georgia. I've seen a lot of this country, and still have much more of the world to explore. I go to Berry College in Rome, GA, and I've been here since August of 2009. When I'm not in class or on the computer, I'm probably doing something ridiculously dorky or adventuring with my brother and friends. I ran on track and cross country teams since I was 8 until I finally retired last year, but I also really enjoy playing baseball when the opportunity presents itself. I love music especially when it's live and even more so when it's Vertical Horizon. I grew up on science fiction movies and comic books. If you have a conversation with me, it's a good bet that 90% of everything I say is a direct quote from a movie that I've seen. I volunteer as a contributing editor for bobafett.com, and am a self proclaimed expert on that particular brand of fiction. I'd like to think I'm a jack-of-all trades. If it's got gears, wires or nails in it i can fix/build it. I love Braves games and have been a lifelong fan. I've worked at the O'Charley's in Acworth for five years but only about once a month because I live an hour away. At school I have two jobs. The first is Viking Fusion, the multimedia department here on campus as the online editor, where I plan on enhancing my film skills while I work towards a degree in Visual Communication. I'm also Jason Peterson's teaching assistant for his journalism courses. If our resemblance to Uncle Fester and Pugsley amuses you as well, please feel free to chuckle.
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